The song for the most part feels ok.
It does feel a bit incoherent at times but that's not a huge issue.
I REALLY like your intro. The only problem I had with it is during what sounded like a key change. It sounded like you didn't change your bass line with the melody, making it sound very dissonant.
Other than that. Pretty good. (BTW, this sounds more like Arp than Techno, but Newgrounds doesn't have Arp as a genre so....)
The whole song just felt kind of empty. Your build up from :28 - :42 only served to make the song feel flatter by being very anticlimactic.
1:25 - The Sub kick overpowers the synth making it feel very hollow.
The melody is very incoherent and boring. There is almost no bass line to speak of.
I'm not trying to sound like a jackass but there is a lot that can be done with this song.
The synth's entries seemed a bit too harsh. The melody seems a bit incoherent. It also got old pretty fast. Towards the middle-end, things felt a bit too cluttered.
The main problem with this piece however, is that there is too much variety in your choice of synth. It makes the whole song just feel incoherent.
While I usually don't care for this genre, I liked this very much. This was very fun to listen to, a vote 5 to you.
Thanks a lot, I appreciate your feedback!
Here is some Criticism.
Your intro seemed to be a bit too long. I do like your choice of sounds but the melody isn't right. There aren't any 32nd notes (which the melody has) if you want me to send you a .flp with the melody I'd he happy to. Other than the intro, I like your progression.
Should you choose to redo this, I would recommend shortening your intro a bit, fix up the melody a bit, (maybe use the melody you have here as build up, then hit hard with the melody (should you want me to send it to you) that I can give you.)
a remix should be different from the original... it wouldnt really be a remix if it sounded the same.. as for 32nd notes... they sounded really bad in the first place no offense to Splash... just sounded like there was too much going on in the melody for the tempo etc
Dear God Sir!
I found this song on youtube as part of a tf2 vocal song. I saw that there was a link to the original song. I now find myself here thinking, wow, newgrounds needs a better way to list top music. The way it works now is it just lists it by rating... but that doesn't work because that just makes the top full of new songs that only have one rating of 5. This song is a 4.40, it's going to be at least 5 pages back in the techno section... this deserves to be on page 1. if it werent for ShadowthePast's on youtube, I would have never found this song. Newgrounds really needs to improve it's top music list, to incorporate age, views, votes, downloads and then rating. Seriously, this song is amazing... I find no fault with it. I hope that one day I may be able to top this song, that day is a long time away.
Hey man, I agree that the AudioPortal could do with some improvements!
It's basically why I haven't posted songs for the past year..
Thanks SO much for the awesome review!!
Cat to the rescue...
I love it, This piece is perfect for my Bio Project... It's got a real nice grove to it.
Haha! you'll get an A+ for sure :P
Thanks for reviewing!
Reminds me alot of Russia Privjet
I love the melody, but I wish you had a bit more build up melody wise. The high notes are amazing but need to be used more as a finally. Not for the whole song, just to a section. Because it gets used as much as it does, it makes people become jaded to it and it becomes out of place. Other than that, its awesome.
Yea, I know what you mean, but I couldn't come up with any "filler" and just decided to aly down the meat and potatoes so to speak.
Thanks for reviewing! :D
This is not a remix
putting a kick clap kick clap behind the vocal track is not a remix... I hear like 2 instances where you even have a synth.
I really, really like your kick and clap, and your synths. There's not too much variation, but you change the synth enough so i stay interested. this is awesome
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